Review – One Last Gift

Review – One Last Gift

One last gift is a rather nasty little short.

Background

So a prompt about gift giving took me to a dark place. I had only recently drafted this scene, and knew it would be a while before it would be posted on the Ad Astra Archive. Therefore, I lifted the scene, nearly intact, and presented it as the answer to the prompt.

Plot

Barking up the Muse Tree | jespah | Janet Gershen-Siegel | Clockworks | One Last Gift

Clockworks

An endgame comes about for two characters. The scene takes place during Shake Your Body.

It is the last few moments of Boris Yarin and Marisol Castillo‘s lives. Also, she is putting the screws to him, threatening to tell his wife, Darragh Stratton, everything about their affair. Hence he is about to lose his job, his one security. He is part-Klingon, and the anticipated dishonor is far too much to bear. And so he quite literally takes matters into his own hands. Therefore, this little scene punches the members of the Temporal Integrity Commission in the gut. In addition, it moves the overall story arc along well, by pulling the reader from the end of Where the Wind Comes Sweepin’ Down the Plain to Shake Your Body to, eventually, the endgame of He Stays a Stranger.

Story Postings

Rating

This story is rated K+.

Upshot

This chilling little story did get people interested in Boris and Marisol, but not enough to really get them reading. Ah,  well. The timing was not right. However, it did work out rather well to keep me motivated and writing. There had been several times during writing The Times of the HG Wells where I had not so much lost interest as lost some of the thread of the plot. The series had far too many subplots; this scene ends two of them rather memorably.

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Shuttlepod pilot, fan fiction writer, sentient marsupial canid.