Review – Pacing
Review – Pacing – Background
I decided that I wanted them to have a home, which would be a house not too different from a house that a present-day couple would live in.
When a Star Trek fanfiction prompt about the natural world was put forward, it provided the perfect opportunity to show Doug planning this very important present, which culminates in the successor story, The Gift.
The short story begins with Doug waiting for a realtor, on Lafa II. He’s got an old-fashioned piece of paper and a pencil. But first he jogs up a little rise and likes the view. Sharp-eyed readers will recall how the rise fits in with both Temper and Fortune. However, the realtor, a native Calafan, tells him that the land up the rise is considerably more expensive than the land that Doug was initially considering. He decides to go with his original plan.
Doug then proceeds to sketch and measure, as well as he can, the dimensions of the planned home. He’s not meant to be an engineer, artist, or architect, so the drawing is a crude one. All the while, he talks to himself, thinking out loud about how Lili would love a big kitchen and the view and the quiet remoteness of the area. He takes into account a room for the baby – Joss – and even a guest room. He wants everything to be perfect.
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The story is Rated K.
I love this little story, as it rather neatly prefigures a lot of the later In Between Days story line, from the rise, to the location of the kitchen, to how Doug tries so hard to please Lili and, even, their financial concerns.
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