Review – The Pivot Point
Pivot point – like for a ballerina. And for a life. A turning point.
Background
So the initial prompt was about a pivotal moment in a character’s life. This got me thinking of a ballerina, pivoting on her toes. And that immediately led me to Shelby Pike, but then I decided I would rather go with Susan Cheshire. Because she would need a change a lot more.
Plot
Shifting between the Star Trek: Enterprise Prime Universe and the Mirror Universe, both Susans weigh the same question. And it is whether to quit drinking. Both are with Aidan MacKenzie.
In the Prime Universe, Aidan is supportive, offering to talk to Captain Reed about taking some time off to help Susan with her struggles.
Except in the Mirror, Aidan can’t take any time, as he has to be at Empress Hoshi‘s beck and call. Ultimately, the decision that is made differs, this depends upon the universe in question.
Yvonne Nelson as Susan Cheshire (image is for educational purposes only)
The decision to quit or continue drinking is, of course, Susan’s alone. But her circumstances certainly define and dictate which way the dice are going to roll.
Story Postings
- The Pivot Point on Fanfiction.net
- also, The Pivot Point on Fictionpad
- The Pivot Point on Wattpad
- The Pivot Point in In Between Days context
Rating
The story has a K+ rating.
Upshot
So I like the juxtapositions. I think they work pretty well.
Although I probably could have done more to differentiate the two situations. If this could have been done without having to rely on font formatting, I think it could have, overall, been a stronger piece. As it is now, it’s okay. It’s adequate. but I feel it has got room for improvement.
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