Review – The Mess
I wanted very much to have a story that starts off as cleaning a kitchen and then, well, what sort of mess is it, anyway?
You don’t want to know.
And there’s a mess on the wall, and a mess on the floor.
As the story goes on, it becomes apparent that there have been boarding parties on the ship. What is on the floor, and on the wall, are the remains of something sentient. Hayes and Slocum come in. And Lili is still, barely, coherent.
Lili remembers the story in Conversations with Heroes, although she feels anything but heroic.
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The story is Rated K.
I like how the story played out although I think I could have emphasized Lili’s panting and her fear and her coming down from an adrenaline high, a little bit more.